English Language Arts, Standard B. WRITING
Sample Proficiency Standard--High School
Explanation of Ratings and Samples of Student Work
Nearly Proficient. The writer has a sense of order with an introduction and logical progression of story. Some transitions are used and words such as "collide," "elderly," and "dispatch" add to the overall effect of the writing. Use of dialogue is attempted near the end. While the writer demonstrates understanding of composition, the lack of paragraphing, the errors in punctuation and usage, and the general difficulty in readability detract from the delivery of the message. Improvement in these areas is needed to assist this piece in its overall effectiveness.