English Language Arts, Standard B. WRITING
Sample Proficiency Standard--High School
Explanation of Ratings and Samples of Student Work
Proficient. The writer captures the reader's attention in the first paragraph and holds the interest throughout the piece. A clear sense of beginning, middle, and end is evident in the organization, and appropriate paragraphing is used. Sentence variety and use of dialogue add to the effectiveness of this piece. The vocabulary includes effective words such as "jolted," "murmered," and "eventually." The few punctuation and usage errors do not detract from the writing. While this writing is clearly proficient, it is not advanced. Greater detail, some word choice changes, and some general revisions could increase the overall delivery of this writing.